Okay. Here's my "review".
Bad Graphics. I don't get the plot...at all. If you want people to read the text, put the code: stop(); in the actions box (it's action script [Make sure it's for the frame, and not the MC). No background music. Try spending actual time on your flash. Don't make "bobby" a dot. What were those objects in the "background". Maybe start with a play button. If you have flash questions, ask me. Mmmkay?
1/10. Sorry.