Topic: The Bikini Bottom Rock Bottom War

[foulpattie]

I've made 2 other fanfics but they are bad. This is the first chapter and it is pretty short. I may change some stuff but i need to know if anyone likes it. Give me your honest opinion. I really don't think its that good.

This is rated SV for strangeness and violence, also some bleped out langueage.





                                              Bikini Bottom Rock Bottom War  
            Chapter 1  


THE CHUMBUKET  
Plankton: Karen, I just don’t get it. Why can’t I steal a krabby patty?
Karen: Maybe its just because your stupid.  
Plankton: What did you say you idiotic machine!
Karen: Whoops. I mean you need help. Get some help.
Plankton: Yes Yes  Yeeeeeeeeeeeeeessssssssss!

KRUSTY KRAB
Mr. Krabs: You boys better be more careful. Plankton is getting closer and closer.
*Looks over at door and plankton is there*
Mr. Krabs: Holy $hit!  
*Mama Krabs comes in and gives him a bi*ch slap then leaves*
*Plankton comes in with his eyes have open and wearing a leather jacket he’s also holding a boom box*
Boom box: Be boo boo boo bop boo boo bop bop be bop boo *Electric guitar*
*music stops*  
……….
Boom box: Who let the dogs out who who who who let the dogs out who whoo whooooo whooooooooooo let the dogs out whoooooooooooooooooooooooooo
*Mr krabs presses the stop button*
Spongebob: What the *dolphin noise* is a dog Mr. Krabs?
*Fred comes in*
Fred: Hey everyone lets go to the shell shack they have a talking dog!

SHELL SHACK  

Fred: Hey everyone look, it’s the talking dog!
*Dog eating everyone*
Crowd: Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh Run for your lives it’s going to kill us all.

Chapter 2 is coming soon………

[djwit_atie]

i think its a good starting :tongue:  

[falco]

it was cool until...."dog eats all"
sigh, i think i lost 10 iq points there    

[1kenny]

it's a good fanfic so far

[djwit_atie]

yea it is a good starting but u left it hanging

[Super Ry]

that was really good. just couldn't stant the violence. :sad: 4-stars

[djwit_atie]

there was violence???

[Super Ry]

yes
Mr. Krabs: Holy $hit!

[djwit_atie]

oh, ok cussing is violins?

[foulpattie]

I'm glad u guys/girls like it. cept 4 the cursing right. think i should get rid of it.  

[lemonsrock103]

Yeah i think you should too, spongebob would never swear, only with a dolphin noise!

[foulpattie]

ok i edited it.

[djwit_atie]

yea cuz SB promised never 2 cuss again

[foulpattie]

That doesn't matter it's a fanfic made by me. i could have spongebob die if i wanted to.

[Hannahbal]

I honestly didnt like it very much. The plot wasnt all that good, and the fact that there was cussing really made it lose some points.